Maligne Canyon piece

-format is a memo (which seems odd)
-very detailed-zoomed in on detail but also presented the big picture (like a travelogue)
-was interesting
-liked the second part and thought the writer should have started there
-the first part may have needed to come as a second part
-more personal than scientific in the beginning
-this is a student observation which does happen in academic writing, and we need more descriptive information first and then add the research
-ie. erosion could come after the writer describes what he/she saw
-there needs to be some description of why the photo appears
-shows the difficulty students often have inserting photos, diagrams, tables into the discussion
-the photo needed a caption
-footnotes are references (we weren’t sure if this is appropriate)
-this is a science paper, so we want the references and these do appear
-good, detailed, vivid langauge

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